Before: abstract feature-first tooltip with unclear action.
After: direct action plus expected outcome in one short line.
Before/after example A: Configure your workflow environment to unlock functionality becomes Connect your first source to start reports.
Before/after example B: Please proceed with completing setup at your convenience becomes Finish setup now to generate your first result.
Change explanation: users need action and outcome clarity before feature detail.
Apply pattern in first-run tooltips, empty states, and activation emails.
Validate with tool_open to tool_run progression and first successful action rate.
Use Sentence Rewriter for microcopy variants and Readability Checker for scanability checks.
Keep terms consistent with UI labels to reduce cognitive switching.
CTA: test one onboarding flow in the tool and compare before/after output.